- use a range of precise vocabulary to communicate meaning (Year ⅞)
- use all basic punctuation independently and attempt more complex punctuation (e.g. semicolons, colons, parentheses) (Year 7/8
Jeff
As the sun rose the early birds perched, briiiing! Jeff quickly sat up and pressed snooze on his old 1700 saga( old touch screen phone).Jeff hopped out of his old, wooden bed and changed his clothes.Jeff was a 16 year old boy that liked to study,he lived in Auckland and his dad went to work at dawn and his mum like to continue to sleep in the morning, so he was always alone.Jeff quickly ate breakfast and headed off to school.
Jeff stopped at the steel gate.As Jeff entered he felt a series of feelings as he entered: nervousness, excitement and tension. Today Jeff was getting his test results And he hoped to get the highest scores like every other day, so he walked straight to class and hung his brown bag on the dull hook.As he entered Mr Dab greeted him "Good morning Jeff."Jeff quickly greeted him and strolled over to his desk and started scanning the class looking for the top five list, but when he saw the list he fell on his knees.
A pang of sorrow had filled Jeff's heart, he had realized his name was not on the list.Meanwhile, Juan(Jeff's best friend)had entered, but before Juan could even greet him Jeff had rushed out of through the football pitch, passed the school gates, and just like that Jeff had disappeared. The teachers quickly called Jeff's mother to call them and asked if Jeff had come home, but no one even had a clue where Jeff could be, after all he looked at the prank list. The teachers quickly called the police.The police listened to the story and decided to take this to the next level and dispatch every police in Auckland's police headquarters.
Jeff was still being searched for and still no one had a clue where Jeff was.One day Juan was searching for Jeff, he ended up walking through this small alley way and there seemed to be a turn at the end, so he turned and then, THUMP!Juan starred at this sight and yelled, what Juan saw was Jeff's dead body hanged on a rope.Luckily Juan had a lighter with him so he quickly burnt Jeff's body so he could be in piece, and just like that Jeff had completely vanished.
As the sun rose the early birds perched, briiiing! Jeff quickly sat up and pressed snooze on his old 1700 saga( old touch screen phone).Jeff hopped out of his old, wooden bed and changed his clothes.Jeff was a 16 year old boy that liked to study,he lived in Auckland and his dad went to work at dawn and his mum like to continue to sleep in the morning, so he was always alone.Jeff quickly ate breakfast and headed off to school.
Jeff stopped at the steel gate.As Jeff entered he felt a series of feelings as he entered: nervousness, excitement and tension. Today Jeff was getting his test results And he hoped to get the highest scores like every other day, so he walked straight to class and hung his brown bag on the dull hook.As he entered Mr Dab greeted him "Good morning Jeff."Jeff quickly greeted him and strolled over to his desk and started scanning the class looking for the top five list, but when he saw the list he fell on his knees.
A pang of sorrow had filled Jeff's heart, he had realized his name was not on the list.Meanwhile, Juan(Jeff's best friend)had entered, but before Juan could even greet him Jeff had rushed out of through the football pitch, passed the school gates, and just like that Jeff had disappeared. The teachers quickly called Jeff's mother to call them and asked if Jeff had come home, but no one even had a clue where Jeff could be, after all he looked at the prank list. The teachers quickly called the police.The police listened to the story and decided to take this to the next level and dispatch every police in Auckland's police headquarters.
Jeff was still being searched for and still no one had a clue where Jeff was.One day Juan was searching for Jeff, he ended up walking through this small alley way and there seemed to be a turn at the end, so he turned and then, THUMP!Juan starred at this sight and yelled, what Juan saw was Jeff's dead body hanged on a rope.Luckily Juan had a lighter with him so he quickly burnt Jeff's body so he could be in piece, and just like that Jeff had completely vanished.
